Friday, October 1, 2010

Fateful Distractions

My thoughts are the barbed wire of contempt
My dreams the lucid images of God
My hands broken but able to perform miracles

This is the will that guides me
This makes it all for naught
Will I be able to break through fate?

My dreams are a nightmarish raze
My mind a butterfly fluttering in despair
My heart is a weighty anchor lodged deep into my chest
I am solitude, I am loneliness, I am alone.

I race through the broken doorway
Unable to see what lies through
My legs ache with the pain of a thousand miles ran
My knees cry out like they do only when it rains
I will keep running through that doorway
Time and time again
Even though it’s a gaping chasm
That I think I can never fill.
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26 comments:

  1. Samuel JeffersonOctober 1, 2010 at 4:07 PM

    Very nice, I like it.

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  2. vibeOctober 1, 2010 at 4:09 PM

    me too

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  3. UnknownOctober 1, 2010 at 6:15 PM

    Excellent flow to this, sir.

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  4. BromatkoOctober 1, 2010 at 6:38 PM

    Damn... that poem rolls off the tongue well. I enjoy it a lot

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  5. AnonymousOctober 1, 2010 at 6:43 PM

    well done, supporting!

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  6. JaredOctober 1, 2010 at 7:16 PM

    deep yo, keep em coming.

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  7. AllenOctober 1, 2010 at 7:43 PM

    The rhythm is very smooth, even though there are no rhymes. I feel the sorrow and loneliness through your words.

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  8. Waldo09October 1, 2010 at 8:14 PM

    cool poem man!

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  9. vladimirOctober 1, 2010 at 9:42 PM

    thats heavy stuff, i feel you.

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  10. musicandmilkOctober 1, 2010 at 10:30 PM

    extremely interesting

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  11. ReviewsFromTheWretchOctober 1, 2010 at 10:48 PM

    God you should be a professional poet you're so talented!

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  12. MIPSOctober 1, 2010 at 10:49 PM

    I am inundated by an ocean of metaphors

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  13. jokerOctober 1, 2010 at 11:15 PM

    i like this, very poetic but with metaphors lol


    add me back

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  14. TheCoolIglooOctober 1, 2010 at 11:31 PM

    Deep stuff

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  15. HighestDefOctober 1, 2010 at 11:38 PM

    HUH

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  16. RonNiebOyOctober 1, 2010 at 11:42 PM

    poetry has always been relaxing and somewhat soothing to me, keep up the good work

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  17. JWilliamsOctober 1, 2010 at 11:47 PM

    this is probably the best thing i've heard or read all day.

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  18. pixelOctober 1, 2010 at 11:55 PM

    excellent writing! look forward to more like this

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  19. killerkunOctober 2, 2010 at 12:23 AM

    Wake up every day and feel like this... what do??

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  20. AnonymousOctober 2, 2010 at 12:32 AM

    This is a very trippy blog and I intend to follow it.

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  21. AnduOctober 2, 2010 at 1:21 AM

    Deep stuff bro. Also to answer the question you left on my blog - yes, those series are fairly old but that doesn't mean they aren't good.

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  22. KekiOctober 2, 2010 at 8:46 AM

    Did you write it?
    It's really deep and I'm probably going to have to read it through a few times before understanding it properly.

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  23. The Greater SpartanOctober 2, 2010 at 11:16 AM

    useful indeed haha not as much as my reviews ;)

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  24. MikeNeumanOctober 2, 2010 at 12:34 PM

    @Keki: Yeah, everything on here is written by me unless I put it in quotes.

    Thanks for all the comments!

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  25. AnonymousOctober 2, 2010 at 7:28 PM

    So moving...

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  26. CrammarcOctober 3, 2010 at 9:52 AM

    excellent

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